Tuesday, 5 March 2013

Peer-Editing and Blue Paper

Assalamualaikum. Today class we have to bring laptop again. Yesterday, we have finished the self-editing. Today, we change my essay to Nadia Zamri and Nadia Salehin for second draft of my essay. She has to comment and give mark for my essay. I and Zubaidah do the same thing. We must comment their essay and do the peer-editing. So, they are my self-editing and peer-editing:


They are my essay that Nadia Zamri and Nadia Salehin commenting:


     Deputy Education Minister, Datuk Wee Ka Siong said, “Students would be allowed to bring hand phone to school starting 2013”. Mobile phones are believed to be useful in teaching and learning at schools. With mobile phones, students can access their lessons almost anywhere and anytime, said Quinn, 2000 and Mellow, 2005. Mobile phones could be considered as a motivational tool for learning. She has conducted many learning activities with mobile phones and these activities have shown positive outcomes, said Kolb, 2008. Although the government authorized students to bring hand phone to school, there are strong claims that bring hand phone to school will bring more negative result than positive ones.

     Bringing hand phones to school can give more benefits to secondary school students. Firstly, when the secondary school students bring hand phones to school, it can make lesson easier. According to Kolb (2008), hand phones which are popular among young students, might be measured as a motivational factor for learning. Besides that, through hand phones, young students are able to comprehend their lessons almost anywhere and at anytime. However, this statement is inconclusive. Those who disagree, saying that bringing hand phone to school might invite secondary school students to misuse the phone. (You must delete the comma) [k1] For example, students use the hand phones to taking and sharing unsuitable graphic materials. In addition, with bringing hand phone to school can help students to cheat in examinations easily. According to National Union of Teaching Profesion (NUTP) President, Hashim Adnan (2012), bringing hand phone to school it would create more disciplinary problems among the young students.

     Another point, with hand phone, it can gives many useful function and application for the hand phone. Sometimes, students need to calculate numbers in their Mathematics lesson or another subjects. So, with a hand phone students can use to calculate numbers in their Mathematics lesson or another subjects  (Do grammar correction =another subject) [k2] . Another reason, with hand phone, students can play the game that has quizzes in hand phones. It can help them to measure their performance. According to Shiratuddin & Zaibon (2009), mobile game based learning is a good function of hand phones for secondary school students.  What they say might be true. Nevertheless, bringing hand phone to school will give the negative impact to students. Hand phone will become a distraction in the student’s lesson. For example, new messages or incoming calls will surely disturb the secondary school student’s attention on what the teacher is teaching in front of the class. According Hashim Adnan (2012), bringing hand phone to secondary school would damage the young student’s concentration and can make more disciplinary problems.

     Lastly, the benefit of bringing hand phone to school among secondary school students is students can use the hand phone during emergency cases which may occur anytime. When the students become sick at the school, they have to return home late because of extra class or involve in accident, they can tell directly to her parents about it through the hand phone. Besides that, if the students are in a dangerous situation like being alone at the bus  stop (too much spacing)  [k3] or endanger by other students, they can call their parents or the polices for help. Another reason, when the students do homework and they do not know the meaning of sentences, they can use hand phone to search internet to find the meaning. To a certain extent they are right. Nevertheless, the emergency cases do not happen often especially when the students are in the school areas. Begin with bring hand phone to school, it can increase social problem among secondary school students. Students will use hand phones for online facebook,  (Capital F) [k4] twitter and so on. Besides that, they use the hand phones to messages their boyfriend or girlfriend and this can make a social problems among secondary students. According to Dr Wee (2012), many pregnant teenagers that’s ( the grammar is wrong. Please correct it) [k5] among young school students who are under the age of 18 and also unmarried.
     Due to the evidences that have been proven by the researchers, it is really clear that bringing hand phone to secondary school is distract the secondary school student’s attention and it also can make a disciplinary problems that can create increasing number of social problems among them.

Kolb, L. (2008) Toys to Tools. Eugene: International Society for Technology in Education.\
Sharifah, (2012) Are handphones and IT gadgets a necessity for students?. The Malaysian          Times. Retrieved December 3, 2012, from http://www.themalaysiantimes.com.my/are-         handphones-and-it-gadgets-a-necessity-for-students/
Shiratuddin, N. & Zaibon, S. (2009, December) Local content game: The preferred choice for       mobile learning space. Retrieved December 4, 2012 from             http://www.ascilite.org.au/conferences/auckland09/procs/norshuhada.pdf
Tan, E. L. (2012, July 16). Students can take handphones, IT gadgets to school from 2013. The   Star. Retrieved December  3, 2012, from       http://thestar.com.my/news/story.asp?file=/2012/7/16/nation/20120716193345&sec=nati    on
Technology Education (2006). Cell Phones: A Tool for Cheating. Retrieved December 4, 2012    from http://www.bamaed.ua.edu/edtechcases/case7.html

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