Commenting Our First Draft

Assalamualaikum. Today is week 11. Fuh !!! We bring our laptop to the class because Miss Zu want to check first draft of term paper. Miss Zu said we need to changing our first draft with other group to commenting our first draft essay. I and Zubaidah change our essay to Fikri and Faiz Adha group. We think, her essay very good and best. We don't have any idea to commenting her essay. At the same time, Miss Zu give back our outline term paper. We get 3.75 marks because forgot to put transition signlas. Because of that, we lost 3 marks. Erh !!! There are commenting from Fikri and Faiz Adha group:

     Deputy Education Minister, Datuk Wee Ka Siong said, “Students would be allowed to bring hand phone to school starting 2013”. Mobile phones are believed to be useful in teaching and learning at schools by bringing mobile phones, students can access their lessons almost anywhere and anytime ,(Yes, absolutely true but if we let the students bringing their mobile phone at the school they may access many thing through internet. They will prefer using internet instead of books in the library which is more reliable than internet) said Quinn, 2000 and Mellow, 2005. Mobile phone could be considered as a motivational tool for learning. She has conducted many learning activities with mobile phone and these activities have shown positive outcomes, said Kolb, 2008. The government authorized students to bring hand phone to school, there are strong claims that bring hand phone to school will bring more negative result than positive.  Although the government authorized students to bring hand phone to school, there are strong claims that bringing hand phone to school will bring more negative result than positive ones.

     Bringing hand phones to school can give more benefits to secondary school students. Firstly, when the secondary school students bring hand phones to school, it can make lesson easier .(Please zubaidah and ani, refer to the expression of the opponents claim!!!!!) According to Kolb (2008) , hand phones which are popular among young students, might be measured as a motivational factor for learning. Besides that, through hand phones, young students are able to comprehend their lessons almost anywhere and at any time. However, this statement is inconclusive. Those who disagree, saying that bringing hand phone to school might invite secondary school students to misuse the phone. For example, students use the hand phones to taking and sharing unsuitable graphic materials. In addition, with bringing hand phone to school can help students to cheat in examinations easily. According to National Union of Teaching Profesion (NUTP) President, Hashim Adnan (2012), bringing hand phone to school would create more disciplinary problems among the young students.

     Another point, with hand phones, it can give many useful function and application for the hand phone. (Students will more interested to playing game, downloading application, playing the application and many more rather than to focus on their study)  Sometimes, students need to calculate numbers in their Mathematics lesson or another subject. So, with a hand phone students can use to calculate numbers in their Mathematics lesson or another subject. Another reason, with hand phones, students can play the game that has quizzes in hand phones. It can help them to measure their performance. According to Shiratuddin & Zaibon (2009), mobile game based learning is a good function of hand phones for secondary school students.  What they say might be true. Nevertheless, bringing hand phone to school will give the negative impact to students. Hand phones will become a distraction in the student’s lesson. (We agree with this statement because mobile phone at this age more advance with many applications and lead to expand the function of the mobile phone) For example, new messages or incoming calls will surely disturb the secondary school student’s attention on what the teacher is teaching in front of the class. According Hashim Adnan (2012), bringing hand phone to secondary school would damage the young student’s concentration and can make more disciplinary problems .

     Lastly, the benefit of bringing hand phones to school among secondary school students is students can use the hand phone during emergency cases which may occur anytime. When the students become sick at the school, they have to return home late because of extra class or involve in accident,(The reason is not strong enough.)  they can tell directly to her parents about it through by the hand phone. Besides that, if the students are in a dangerous situation like being alone at the bus stop or endanger by other students, they can call their parents or polices for help. Another reason, when the students do homework and they do not know the meaning of sentences, they can use hand phone to search internet to find the meaning. To a certain extent they are right. Nevertheless, the emergency cases do not happen often especially when the students are in the school areas. Begin with bring hand phone to school, it can increase social problem among secondary school students. Students will use hand phones for online facebook, twitter and so on. Besides that, they use the hand phones to messages their boyfriend or girlfriend and this can make a social problem among secondary students. According to Dr Wee (2012), many pregnant teenagers that are among young school students who are under the age of 18 and also unmarried.

     Due to the evidences that have been proven by the researchers, it is really clear that bringing hand phone to secondary school is distract the secondary school student’s attention and it also can make a disciplinary problems that can create increasing number of social problems among them.